Although short, there was interesting imagery here. I was sad it was so short; I was hoping there would be more. I felt like there should have been more. And it left me wanting more but knowing there was nothing more.

The second set is was what made this poem for me. I loved the visual of this. It is powerful and it drove me to read of the rest of it. The rest seemed like an excellent frame to a perfectly depicted photo.

Besides being left wanting, some of the placements of punctuation was a little strange; though I understand it was part of the expression.

Keep writing!