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fingers blazing away,
while(1) {
taptaptaptaptaptaptaptap; // fingers
taptaptaptaptaptaptaptap; // blazing
taptaptaptaptap; // away,
taptap; // \n\n
taptaptaptaptap; // while
taptaptap; // (1)
taptap; // {
};
insomniacly feeding the page
with characters
words and phrases
clips of code or
poetic blunders
// thankgodfor the [<-backspace] key
// iwonderhow i would getby withoutit
/*
* Maybe I should just
*
* It would make life
*
*/
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My critique:
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Critique questions:
This poem contains elements of computer programming. Assuming that you aren't well-versed in programming languages, does this hinder your ability to understand the key themes and underlying message of this poem?
In addition to the previous question, do you think I should (or need to) include information that lets readers know the technical details of what I've written, or should I leave it as it is, leaving the interpretation up to the reader?
From the perspective of free-verse poetry, do you think this poem makes good use of the lack of traditionally structured form?
Finally, a more open ended question, what did you think about this poem when you read it the first time? ("It was too difficult to read the first time," "It didn't make sense," etc.)
Thank you for your input
Information for
My critique:
[link]
Critique questions:
This poem contains elements of computer programming. Assuming that you aren't well-versed in programming languages, does this hinder your ability to understand the key themes and underlying message of this poem?
In addition to the previous question, do you think I should (or need to) include information that lets readers know the technical details of what I've written, or should I leave it as it is, leaving the interpretation up to the reader?
From the perspective of free-verse poetry, do you think this poem makes good use of the lack of traditionally structured form?
Finally, a more open ended question, what did you think about this poem when you read it the first time? ("It was too difficult to read the first time," "It didn't make sense," etc.)
Thank you for your input
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Overall Vision Originality Technique ImpactI should start by saying that I am versed in the matter spoken of, albeit not extremely so. It was surely a good and unique touch to the entry, no puns intended. While that added an extra dimension to the poem, I assume it was a poem, it simultaneously affected the general expression in that there were fewer actual words. The submission could work better as a visual poem. I will admit that it is a very unusual and thoughtful work as a whole. I would like to see a culmination of the two ideas as a poem with visual effects like this plus more words, if that is possible. Carry on writing.